Personal pronoun: The Writer
FOR OOM PIETE
Feels helpless
When I was least happy in life -POIGNANT OPENING
Unable to do so herself.
my daughter led me across the road
Oblivious to the negative aspects of life.
evoking a keen sense of sadness or regret.
to a neighbour whom I did not know
with the purpose of a toddler ENJAMAMENT – shows flowing of emotions during
She is naïve and innocent.
hardship.
who does not see gates and fences
but the ducks and puppies
Her daughter is innocent as she is still unaware of
on the other side. life's challenges and only sees "the ducks and
Indicated a transition/ change required puppies on the other side." however, she is also
to bring a sense of peace. intuitive and caring : she knows her mother needs
help so she "led [her] across the road" too Oom Piet.
reader’s attention away from the writer and to him and highlighting
She feels isolated/ caged in/ separated.
ANAPHORA – Repetition of “You” refers to Oom Piete, drawing the
Her toddler disregards those to find community.
his generous actions. It honours him + shows his importance.
Onomatopoeia
You spoke to me in the same low murmuring tones Compassionate + gentle
grumpy
Joins 2 independent clauses
you used for lame horses and bilious dogs. Suggests he is a down-to-earth person who enjoys
these simple things. He -like the toddler- sees the
Crops, flowers and poultry were our theme: good things on earth (specify more)
you made me tea and wiped the counter, Welcome, comfort, soothing, calming
you said ‘Foeitog’ and ‘I don’t hope so.’ -Quotes from Oom Piete.
You guessed. The writer’s problems are easily recognised by Oom Piete and his wisdom.
EFFECTIVNESS- shows his maturity/ perceptiveness/ sensitivity.
You told me I was beautiful,
Uplifting language : help ease her out of her struggle
polite
In the courtly way of an old man. - She felt comfortable with the compliment
SYNTAX- SHOWS HER LIFE GAINS STRUCTURE AFTER OOM PIETE
SHOWS HER THE NATURAL ELEMENTS OF LIFE
Hope + comfort
One day when it rained -symbolizes her depression
Parenthesis- introduces
additional information
you phoned from your side and said
‘I’m sending some ducks for Beatrix’ -symbolizes nurturing + bonding
The tone
̶ you always called her ‘Beatrix’ Endearing: nickname given (inspired by affection)
Out the window we saw them,
Alliteration- W sound : creates a sense of togetherness
between human and animal.
FOR OOM PIETE
Feels helpless
When I was least happy in life -POIGNANT OPENING
Unable to do so herself.
my daughter led me across the road
Oblivious to the negative aspects of life.
evoking a keen sense of sadness or regret.
to a neighbour whom I did not know
with the purpose of a toddler ENJAMAMENT – shows flowing of emotions during
She is naïve and innocent.
hardship.
who does not see gates and fences
but the ducks and puppies
Her daughter is innocent as she is still unaware of
on the other side. life's challenges and only sees "the ducks and
Indicated a transition/ change required puppies on the other side." however, she is also
to bring a sense of peace. intuitive and caring : she knows her mother needs
help so she "led [her] across the road" too Oom Piet.
reader’s attention away from the writer and to him and highlighting
She feels isolated/ caged in/ separated.
ANAPHORA – Repetition of “You” refers to Oom Piete, drawing the
Her toddler disregards those to find community.
his generous actions. It honours him + shows his importance.
Onomatopoeia
You spoke to me in the same low murmuring tones Compassionate + gentle
grumpy
Joins 2 independent clauses
you used for lame horses and bilious dogs. Suggests he is a down-to-earth person who enjoys
these simple things. He -like the toddler- sees the
Crops, flowers and poultry were our theme: good things on earth (specify more)
you made me tea and wiped the counter, Welcome, comfort, soothing, calming
you said ‘Foeitog’ and ‘I don’t hope so.’ -Quotes from Oom Piete.
You guessed. The writer’s problems are easily recognised by Oom Piete and his wisdom.
EFFECTIVNESS- shows his maturity/ perceptiveness/ sensitivity.
You told me I was beautiful,
Uplifting language : help ease her out of her struggle
polite
In the courtly way of an old man. - She felt comfortable with the compliment
SYNTAX- SHOWS HER LIFE GAINS STRUCTURE AFTER OOM PIETE
SHOWS HER THE NATURAL ELEMENTS OF LIFE
Hope + comfort
One day when it rained -symbolizes her depression
Parenthesis- introduces
additional information
you phoned from your side and said
‘I’m sending some ducks for Beatrix’ -symbolizes nurturing + bonding
The tone
̶ you always called her ‘Beatrix’ Endearing: nickname given (inspired by affection)
Out the window we saw them,
Alliteration- W sound : creates a sense of togetherness
between human and animal.
