Introduction:
Your introduction should: Take this opportunity to:
Indicate the direction of your essay Give a brief contextualisation of the novel (with a link to the topic if possible) and
Make specific reference to the topic indicate which text you are discussing (mention the author and genre of the work)
Body Paragraphs:
Your body paragraphs should: Make sure that your body paragraphs:
Be closely linked to the topic Flow logically from the previous one and onto the next one
Make a series of substantiated points Have a logical internal structure
Conclusion:
Your conclusion should: Take this opportunity to show your insight into the text and the topic by:
Sum up your main points Linking the ideas in your text to the outside world
Leave your reader with a strong answer to the question
Writing your Introduction:
Indicate which text you are discussing (mention the author and genre of the work)
The Mark, a dystopian novel by Edyth Bulbring, is set in a post-apocalyptic society plagued by inequality and injustice.
Give a brief contextualisation of the novel (with a link to the topic if possible)
The protagonist, Ettie, is born into a life of drudgery but is determined to erase her mark and escape the system that confines her.
Make specific reference to the topic and indicate the direction of your essay
This essay will examine the various injustices in Mangeria, a place run by an unequal and unfair political and justice system where the poor are
destined to suffer, and the rich prosper, but very few have any meaningful freedom.
Your introduction:
The Mark, a dystopian novel by Edyth Bulbring, is set in a post-apocalyptic society plagued by inequality and injustice. The protagonist, Ettie, is
born into a life of drudgery but is determined to erase her mark and escape the system that confines her. This essay will examine the various
injustices in Mangeria, a place run by an unequal and unfair political and justice system where the poor are destined to suffer, and the rich
prosper, but very few have any meaningful freedom.
Following PEEL for your body paragraphs:
Point: (the main topic of your paragraph) One of the most obvious injustices in Ettie’s society is the lack of personal freedom of most citizens.
Explanation: (explanation of your point) Instead of making their own choices, all people are given a number when they are born. According to
this number, they are allocated a job and a fate mate.
Example: (example/s to substantiate your point) This number is stored in The Machine and is used to keep track of them throughout their lives.
Ettie is determined to remove this number so she can decide her own fate.
Link: (link back to the topic) The fact that citizens in Mangeria are not allowed to choose their life partner or profession is a clear illustration of
the injustice they suffer as the freedom to choose is one of our most basic human rights.
You might start your next paragraph with this point:
Another obvious indication of an unjust society is the large gap between the rich and the poor, which is evident in the horrible lives lead by those
who inhabit Slum City.
Final Body Paragraphs:
One of the most obvious injustices in Ettie’s society is the lack of personal freedom of most citizens. Instead of making their own choices, all
people are given a number when they are born. According to this number, they are allocated a job and a fate mate. This number is stored in The
Machine and is used to keep track of them throughout their lives. Ettie is determined to remove this number so she can decide her own fate.
The fact that citizens in Mangeria are not allowed to choose their life partner or profession is a clear illustration of the injustice they suffer as the
freedom to choose is one of our most basic human rights.
Another obvious indication of an unjust society is the large gap between the rich and the poor, which is evident in the horrible lives lead by those
who inhabit Slum City (POINT). People like Ettie and Kitty, who are orphans, live in the most appalling and unsanitary conditions
(EXPLAINATION). Sewerage runs in the streets, the river flows with “water the colour of vomit” and they are plagued by flies as big as a human
fist (EXAMPLES). The injustice of this is only highlighted when you compare their lives to those of the Posh (EXPLANATION). The Posh live
over the river in Mangeria City and those in the slums require a pass to access the Posh areas and have to abide by a curfew (EXAMPLE). The
people in Slum City are also considered to be disposable (EXPLANATION). Once they are no longer able to do their job, they are sent to a
facility for Past Traders or are thrown on the Reject Dumps to die (EXAMPLES). The Posh treat those from Slum City as if they are less than
human and this lack of humanity towards those less fortunate is perhaps the biggest marker of an unjust society. (LINK)
How to write Conclusion:
Strong answer to the question
Your introduction should: Take this opportunity to:
Indicate the direction of your essay Give a brief contextualisation of the novel (with a link to the topic if possible) and
Make specific reference to the topic indicate which text you are discussing (mention the author and genre of the work)
Body Paragraphs:
Your body paragraphs should: Make sure that your body paragraphs:
Be closely linked to the topic Flow logically from the previous one and onto the next one
Make a series of substantiated points Have a logical internal structure
Conclusion:
Your conclusion should: Take this opportunity to show your insight into the text and the topic by:
Sum up your main points Linking the ideas in your text to the outside world
Leave your reader with a strong answer to the question
Writing your Introduction:
Indicate which text you are discussing (mention the author and genre of the work)
The Mark, a dystopian novel by Edyth Bulbring, is set in a post-apocalyptic society plagued by inequality and injustice.
Give a brief contextualisation of the novel (with a link to the topic if possible)
The protagonist, Ettie, is born into a life of drudgery but is determined to erase her mark and escape the system that confines her.
Make specific reference to the topic and indicate the direction of your essay
This essay will examine the various injustices in Mangeria, a place run by an unequal and unfair political and justice system where the poor are
destined to suffer, and the rich prosper, but very few have any meaningful freedom.
Your introduction:
The Mark, a dystopian novel by Edyth Bulbring, is set in a post-apocalyptic society plagued by inequality and injustice. The protagonist, Ettie, is
born into a life of drudgery but is determined to erase her mark and escape the system that confines her. This essay will examine the various
injustices in Mangeria, a place run by an unequal and unfair political and justice system where the poor are destined to suffer, and the rich
prosper, but very few have any meaningful freedom.
Following PEEL for your body paragraphs:
Point: (the main topic of your paragraph) One of the most obvious injustices in Ettie’s society is the lack of personal freedom of most citizens.
Explanation: (explanation of your point) Instead of making their own choices, all people are given a number when they are born. According to
this number, they are allocated a job and a fate mate.
Example: (example/s to substantiate your point) This number is stored in The Machine and is used to keep track of them throughout their lives.
Ettie is determined to remove this number so she can decide her own fate.
Link: (link back to the topic) The fact that citizens in Mangeria are not allowed to choose their life partner or profession is a clear illustration of
the injustice they suffer as the freedom to choose is one of our most basic human rights.
You might start your next paragraph with this point:
Another obvious indication of an unjust society is the large gap between the rich and the poor, which is evident in the horrible lives lead by those
who inhabit Slum City.
Final Body Paragraphs:
One of the most obvious injustices in Ettie’s society is the lack of personal freedom of most citizens. Instead of making their own choices, all
people are given a number when they are born. According to this number, they are allocated a job and a fate mate. This number is stored in The
Machine and is used to keep track of them throughout their lives. Ettie is determined to remove this number so she can decide her own fate.
The fact that citizens in Mangeria are not allowed to choose their life partner or profession is a clear illustration of the injustice they suffer as the
freedom to choose is one of our most basic human rights.
Another obvious indication of an unjust society is the large gap between the rich and the poor, which is evident in the horrible lives lead by those
who inhabit Slum City (POINT). People like Ettie and Kitty, who are orphans, live in the most appalling and unsanitary conditions
(EXPLAINATION). Sewerage runs in the streets, the river flows with “water the colour of vomit” and they are plagued by flies as big as a human
fist (EXAMPLES). The injustice of this is only highlighted when you compare their lives to those of the Posh (EXPLANATION). The Posh live
over the river in Mangeria City and those in the slums require a pass to access the Posh areas and have to abide by a curfew (EXAMPLE). The
people in Slum City are also considered to be disposable (EXPLANATION). Once they are no longer able to do their job, they are sent to a
facility for Past Traders or are thrown on the Reject Dumps to die (EXAMPLES). The Posh treat those from Slum City as if they are less than
human and this lack of humanity towards those less fortunate is perhaps the biggest marker of an unjust society. (LINK)
How to write Conclusion:
Strong answer to the question
