Participation Portfolio, Week 6
Task 1: Please check through week 5’s submissions and ensure every post has received
some feedback. Work from the bottom up:
Grace Tobias, task 2, digital life narrative
Things I really liked:
I absolutely loved this piece! I thought it was super creative to look at Pinterest – I’d never
stopped for long enough to consider that a creator’s Pinterest boards represent their
personality, aesthetic, interests, dreams and desires. A notion that this piece explores
critically and creatively.
The piece is written eloquently and carries a distinctive and powerful tone and style.
The questions posed intermittently throughout the piece are well-constructed and incredibly
thought-provoking. I am still pondering the question ‘is there anything wrong with
dreaming?’ and feel that perhaps dreaming in itself is not inherently harmful, but that
dreaming only becomes problematic when it becomes confused with reality. I also found the
final question particularly profound and powerful, likely because it is something I (and likely
many others) relate to.
The layout is clear and aesthetically pleasing (much like Pinterest itself) and the boards and
Tweet included are well-chosen, wide-ranging and striking.
Potential improvements:
ꓫ Although the unanswered questions are powerful, perhaps you could endeavour to answer/
address some of them further. For example, the ‘short investigation’ is introduced as an
exploration of the following questions: ‘is my perception clouded by the beauty of the app?’
and ‘is Pinterest more mindful or mindless?’ While these questions are explored, no final
conclusion is offered. For me, I would have liked a brief conclusion to tie the piece together.
Abi Westrip, task 2, digital life narrative
Things I really liked:
I love the way the piece opens with pictures and no words, as it gives the reader (well,
‘looker’ I suppose) space to imagine the ways in which the images informed/ represent
creator’s life narrative and allows them to shape their own vision and story of this narrative.
I thought the images were brilliantly chosen, as they show online platforms that our whole
generation recognise, relate to, and have been shaped by! This raises interesting questions
about how unique/ personal any one life narrative actually is?! It also leaves me wondering
whether we derive pleasure from reading life-writing because we relate to it personally?
Task 1: Please check through week 5’s submissions and ensure every post has received
some feedback. Work from the bottom up:
Grace Tobias, task 2, digital life narrative
Things I really liked:
I absolutely loved this piece! I thought it was super creative to look at Pinterest – I’d never
stopped for long enough to consider that a creator’s Pinterest boards represent their
personality, aesthetic, interests, dreams and desires. A notion that this piece explores
critically and creatively.
The piece is written eloquently and carries a distinctive and powerful tone and style.
The questions posed intermittently throughout the piece are well-constructed and incredibly
thought-provoking. I am still pondering the question ‘is there anything wrong with
dreaming?’ and feel that perhaps dreaming in itself is not inherently harmful, but that
dreaming only becomes problematic when it becomes confused with reality. I also found the
final question particularly profound and powerful, likely because it is something I (and likely
many others) relate to.
The layout is clear and aesthetically pleasing (much like Pinterest itself) and the boards and
Tweet included are well-chosen, wide-ranging and striking.
Potential improvements:
ꓫ Although the unanswered questions are powerful, perhaps you could endeavour to answer/
address some of them further. For example, the ‘short investigation’ is introduced as an
exploration of the following questions: ‘is my perception clouded by the beauty of the app?’
and ‘is Pinterest more mindful or mindless?’ While these questions are explored, no final
conclusion is offered. For me, I would have liked a brief conclusion to tie the piece together.
Abi Westrip, task 2, digital life narrative
Things I really liked:
I love the way the piece opens with pictures and no words, as it gives the reader (well,
‘looker’ I suppose) space to imagine the ways in which the images informed/ represent
creator’s life narrative and allows them to shape their own vision and story of this narrative.
I thought the images were brilliantly chosen, as they show online platforms that our whole
generation recognise, relate to, and have been shaped by! This raises interesting questions
about how unique/ personal any one life narrative actually is?! It also leaves me wondering
whether we derive pleasure from reading life-writing because we relate to it personally?
