When revising poetry consider the following:
1. Title
2. Purpose/intention
3. Diction and how it adds meaning
4. Mood/atmosphere
5. Tone
6. Figurative devices eg: irony, metaphor etc.
7. Sound devices eg: assonance
8. Structure/form and how it adds meaning
9. Linking to/ making connection- another poem, image
,Tragic poem
1960s
Penguin on a beach word I covered in thick black 011
→ crafter of penguin ,
Ruth Miller → cleverly worded poem
commercial type 011
large scale t destruction
PARADOX → 011 make I hit home unrecognizable
Stranger in his own element,
s injured a survivor washed up → little human figure
Sea-casualty, the castaway manikin
suit ( human references )
a reference to penguin wearing a
Waddles in his tailored coat-tails. Oil SPLIT STANZA
emphasizes 1 draws attention 1
forces a pause
→ money making → white part of shirt
Has spread a deep commercial stain
reference
a feathered Sylt → corrupt
Over his downy shirt front. Sleazy, grey,
suffocating else 's commercial
a
penguins suffer for someone gain
It clogs the sleekness. Far too well
because bad experience
a
He must recall the past, to be so cautious:① → describes his behaviour
→ unusual reaction to the tea
Watch him step into the waves. He shudders
→
white foamy bubbles
Under the froth; slides, slips, on the wet sand, SIBILANCE ( water sound ; soft Shh sounds ]
scarcity of water water tumbles t pours
→
Escaping to dryness, dearth, in a white cascade,
A 011
An involuntary shouldering off of gleam.
a literal or figurative
Hands push him back into the sea. He stands
this )
→ protest ( he 't against
In pained and silent expostulation.
sticky black wary of water
Once he knew a sunlit, leaping smoothness,
head
shape of his
But close with his head’s small knoll, and dark,
11 the image
He retains the image: Oil on sea,
at the end
011 Sticks rope with loop
Green slicks, black lassoos of sludge 011 coming to capture you
→ covering
Sleeving the breakers in a stain-spread scarf.
→ penguin
He shudders now from the clean flinching wave,
slow heavy walk
Turns and plods back up the yellow sand,
unspeakably cautious
oxymoron
Ineffably wary, triumphantly sad.
further explanation
He is immensely wise:ahe trusts nobody. His senses
→
blocked
Are clogged with experience. He eats
→ human intervention to rehabilitate him
→ tainted I poisoned
Fish from the Saviour’s hands, and it tastes black.
&
Christian = allusion
, Set in the Karroo
About SA War ( Anglo -
boer war )
-
The Cry of South Africa ( personification )
South Africa
Olive Schreiner (1855-1920) → writes as
her country men ( colonise )
angry with brltllh for taking 1 killing
Give back my dead! head 1 Mountain
→
They who by kop and fountain landscape
First saw the light upon my rocky breast!
( ANAPHORA )
rep it It 10h
1h11 Hent tone
Give back my
children of
dead, demanding persuasive
SA
→ ,
X
→
The sons who played upon me
fresh youth→ [ young glow ]
i t innocence
When childhood’s dews still rested on their heads.
repltltlon
Give back my dead forceful separation
Who you 've taken
boundary
WhomBritish
thou hast riven from me " ng bnoauunedtotocottmmit
metonymy - army loudly "
I , no choice
By arms of men loud called from earth’s farthest bound trapped → travel
→closeness to i earth ) → by far from
SAI on her 5011 ( killed SA
To wet my bosom with my children’s blood!
repetition
Give back my dead, SA
grew up in
The dead who grew up on me!
"
loud called
" → conscription
propaganda ( encouraged )
Wagenaar’s Kraal,
Three Sisters.
May 9, 1900
Extended metaphor
SA and her people being compared to a mother and her children
"
plop mother
yer t
children
,
gap
BBQ
1
Intimacy
raised
nurturing
attachment
1. Title
2. Purpose/intention
3. Diction and how it adds meaning
4. Mood/atmosphere
5. Tone
6. Figurative devices eg: irony, metaphor etc.
7. Sound devices eg: assonance
8. Structure/form and how it adds meaning
9. Linking to/ making connection- another poem, image
,Tragic poem
1960s
Penguin on a beach word I covered in thick black 011
→ crafter of penguin ,
Ruth Miller → cleverly worded poem
commercial type 011
large scale t destruction
PARADOX → 011 make I hit home unrecognizable
Stranger in his own element,
s injured a survivor washed up → little human figure
Sea-casualty, the castaway manikin
suit ( human references )
a reference to penguin wearing a
Waddles in his tailored coat-tails. Oil SPLIT STANZA
emphasizes 1 draws attention 1
forces a pause
→ money making → white part of shirt
Has spread a deep commercial stain
reference
a feathered Sylt → corrupt
Over his downy shirt front. Sleazy, grey,
suffocating else 's commercial
a
penguins suffer for someone gain
It clogs the sleekness. Far too well
because bad experience
a
He must recall the past, to be so cautious:① → describes his behaviour
→ unusual reaction to the tea
Watch him step into the waves. He shudders
→
white foamy bubbles
Under the froth; slides, slips, on the wet sand, SIBILANCE ( water sound ; soft Shh sounds ]
scarcity of water water tumbles t pours
→
Escaping to dryness, dearth, in a white cascade,
A 011
An involuntary shouldering off of gleam.
a literal or figurative
Hands push him back into the sea. He stands
this )
→ protest ( he 't against
In pained and silent expostulation.
sticky black wary of water
Once he knew a sunlit, leaping smoothness,
head
shape of his
But close with his head’s small knoll, and dark,
11 the image
He retains the image: Oil on sea,
at the end
011 Sticks rope with loop
Green slicks, black lassoos of sludge 011 coming to capture you
→ covering
Sleeving the breakers in a stain-spread scarf.
→ penguin
He shudders now from the clean flinching wave,
slow heavy walk
Turns and plods back up the yellow sand,
unspeakably cautious
oxymoron
Ineffably wary, triumphantly sad.
further explanation
He is immensely wise:ahe trusts nobody. His senses
→
blocked
Are clogged with experience. He eats
→ human intervention to rehabilitate him
→ tainted I poisoned
Fish from the Saviour’s hands, and it tastes black.
&
Christian = allusion
, Set in the Karroo
About SA War ( Anglo -
boer war )
-
The Cry of South Africa ( personification )
South Africa
Olive Schreiner (1855-1920) → writes as
her country men ( colonise )
angry with brltllh for taking 1 killing
Give back my dead! head 1 Mountain
→
They who by kop and fountain landscape
First saw the light upon my rocky breast!
( ANAPHORA )
rep it It 10h
1h11 Hent tone
Give back my
children of
dead, demanding persuasive
SA
→ ,
X
→
The sons who played upon me
fresh youth→ [ young glow ]
i t innocence
When childhood’s dews still rested on their heads.
repltltlon
Give back my dead forceful separation
Who you 've taken
boundary
WhomBritish
thou hast riven from me " ng bnoauunedtotocottmmit
metonymy - army loudly "
I , no choice
By arms of men loud called from earth’s farthest bound trapped → travel
→closeness to i earth ) → by far from
SAI on her 5011 ( killed SA
To wet my bosom with my children’s blood!
repetition
Give back my dead, SA
grew up in
The dead who grew up on me!
"
loud called
" → conscription
propaganda ( encouraged )
Wagenaar’s Kraal,
Three Sisters.
May 9, 1900
Extended metaphor
SA and her people being compared to a mother and her children
"
plop mother
yer t
children
,
gap
BBQ
1
Intimacy
raised
nurturing
attachment
