- Incorporate extended metaphors or ideas
- Link the opening and ending structurally
- (similar sentence, words or vocabulary, or opposing or similar ideas)
- The word ‘imagine’
- (use is as a single word sentence, an imperative or before an important description - usually
emotive)
- Triple abstract noun and colon
- (e.g. despair, degradation, desolation: the eld were left longing for some form of life - a
slight glimmer of hope.)
- Triple adjectives , dash followed by a sentence
- (e.g. cold, dark, airlessness - she struggles to breathe she even struggled to form a
conscious thought)
- Double adjectives
- (e.g. ominous and harrowing, the ebony night seemed to envelope the entire skyline)
- Fronted adverbial
- (e.g. Apprehensively, the vines grappled with the trees eventually establishing dominance
over the natural earth)
- Use range of sentence beginnings
- One word sentences
- e.g. Freedom
- Using the colon to emphasise something important
- (e.g. the natural world once again collided with mankind: the only winner was obvious)
-Avoid Cliches
- Outside, inside - the outside reveals outside actions, the part inside the brackets, comma
or dash reveals the inner emotions of the character/person
- (e.g. she greeted every person who had made an appearance at the hospital (inside however
she felt like an exhibit at the museum)
Paragraphing:
- avoid paragraphs that are way too long in length
- try to manipulate the reader with how you open and end paragraphs
- How you link one paragraph to the net
- Is there an opportunity to use a simple sentence or one word paragraph?
Example related to describing people:
A porcelain object. Fragile. Delicate. Vulnerable. Inevitably her face had aged - some would say
ineptly. However, from every angle she seems poised and regal as if boasting a great title. This
posture was not natural; no, it was rehearsed like a dancer perfecting every turn and pirouette.
Behind the obvious facade there was the body of a woman ruined. Deception could be seen
masking her frailty: upon closer inspection she was completed awed. Even her smile which on
rst glance was an innocent white signalled insecurity. Perhaps the amount to be admired and
aesthetic was overused and tainted.
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